Its Samhain. The line between the spirit
world and our own is a ray of moonlight.
Its the night when the reluctant soul sticks
to our plane, hovering - a withered rose
whose beauty is the figment of a dream;
a gleam gilding the surface of the lake.
For long hours of idyll would the Lake
poets revel in letting their spirit
soar free on the nightingales wings, and dream
of glimpsing their Muse clad in pure moonlight
but tonight magics afoot: clouds just rose
to blur the moon like fumes from incense sticks.
The Romantics habit of rambling sticks
to mind tonight, as I stroll to the lake
and sit down to recall the violent rows
wed have every night, before her spirit
gave itself over to the bland moonlight
and chose to rest and die, not live and dream.
But perhaps tis I thats strayed in a dream?
For in that small nest, fashioned out of sticks,
I see her visage, painted in moonlight.
I glimpse a lady traversing the lake
can it truly be her vagrant spirit,
come to me to grant me a kiss, a rose?
Yes, it must be her but the crimson rose
her cheek used to be (ere her final dream)
is now lily-white. Her ashen spirit
was scorched too soon on the merciless sticks
of fever in her soul. She chills the lake
as she glides a mirage of cool moonlight.
I wade in to touch her as the moonlight
takes on her flimsy frame how frail a rose
she was, still is! Ripples dimple the lake
as our tears drop and bathe with bliss this dream.
What becalming peace I feel as she sticks
to me we both know: were one in spirit.
But the rose wilts too fast in the moonlight.
How to immortalise this spirit, this dream?
How I wish that this lake were the Styx...















Comments
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decus, amor, humilitas
--
"Beauty is truth, truth beauty," - that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.
J. Keats
first, i read it, before
looking at your comments,
noting the re-use of certain
words, not knowing the
format of a cestina, though
i'd seen the term. there
were lines which struck me
as 'oddly' beautiful, but
appropriate to the eerie
mystery of the poem.
after seeking cestina at
wikipedia, and rereading
this poem, i see how perfectly
you wove this together. it
explained your use of sticks
in the next to last stanza,
rather than a more poetic
sounding term, and the ending
of "Styx", which justified
the previous "sticks".
i agree that this may be called
"your best yet", Len. the use
of "Samhain",(i looked this up
too), is brilliance, such a
beautifully poetic, yet slightly
eerie, word.
The six words you chose, all
wonderfully poetic, except for
sticks, which i'd bet was
picked so you could end the
poem with "Styx"? no?
this one should be loved...
pip
--
when a man refers to the woman
[who chose him], as his better half,
for once, he tells the truth. - llp - nov'09
i hope it is
thank you, pip!
--
"Beauty is truth, truth beauty," - that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.
J. Keats
--
decus, amor, humilitas
(thanks for the fav!!!)
--
"Beauty is truth, truth beauty," - that is all
Ye know on earth, and all ye need to know.
J. Keats
--
There's always a better poem just out of reach.
Words create situations [link]
The roots of the future run deep [link]
--
Regards,
Michaeldavitt ; }
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