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October 19, 2009
As our suggester notes, the lovely piece A Legacy of Wisdom by *Leurindal is a classic poem, the like of which I have not seen in quite some time. It contains masterful examples of alliteration, allusions, and internal rhyme, as well as a beautiful sense of flow, maximized by the author's line breaks. Essentially, this poem leaves me breathless, each and every time I read it.
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Suggested by GwenavhyeurAnastasia
Literature Text
You have scribed your words,
wealthy wreaths of wisdom,
on paper never torn or worn.
You have etched your passions
on my brow.
You have left this wallowed world
victorious; eyes resplendent
with the wisdom you wrote and wrought.
Your passions shall echo in my ears
unto eternity.
And should I stray into some
sullen storm, or get caught in
the torrents of the monsoon, I’ll know
that Lear’s been there before, and
I’ll not swoon.
And if Hades’ doors open up
before my stranded soul, and scorch
it with the heat of hell, I’ll recall that
I am not the first – Dante’s been down
there as well.
And if on my death-bed I mourn
the life I wasted on wine and stale
chocolate bars, I’ll recall Wilde’s words and
hope that, though long in the gutter, I did
glimpse the stars.
wealthy wreaths of wisdom,
on paper never torn or worn.
You have etched your passions
on my brow.
You have left this wallowed world
victorious; eyes resplendent
with the wisdom you wrote and wrought.
Your passions shall echo in my ears
unto eternity.
And should I stray into some
sullen storm, or get caught in
the torrents of the monsoon, I’ll know
that Lear’s been there before, and
I’ll not swoon.
And if Hades’ doors open up
before my stranded soul, and scorch
it with the heat of hell, I’ll recall that
I am not the first – Dante’s been down
there as well.
And if on my death-bed I mourn
the life I wasted on wine and stale
chocolate bars, I’ll recall Wilde’s words and
hope that, though long in the gutter, I did
glimpse the stars.
Literature
The Couplet and the Villanelle
The Couplet and the Villanelle
Said the couplet to the villanelle
"You, for all of your complexity
really are a vacuum and a shell
overwrought and odd, compared to me.
You, for all your cunning and your craft
your metaphors and similes and signs
conjure awkward rhymes that make me laugh
strung together in repeating lines."
Said the villanelle to couplet small
"I know I can ramble on at times
but, you know, you are inside of me
and you are complicit in my rhymes.
What's ironic though, you know... doggonnit.
both of us are stuck within this sonnet."
Literature
sempiternal
When I grow old
I want
a thousand
laugh-lines.
For when rainbows dilute and notebooks fatten
on time’s untimely passing,
when the moon falls out of kilter with a sun that
curdles in a sad, forgotten sky,
and the rain congeals inside the clouds
when the slurry of seconds sinks deep into my bones
and my skin crumples like parchment, my spine coils and splinters
and my fingers buckle, knuckle-cracking -
when my dreams fa
Literature
quacking jokes
three ducks explode
into laughter:
private joke
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Last stanza - 'We're all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars' Oscar Wilde
© 2009 - 2024 Leurindal
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Originality Technique ImpactTo start this critique, I think I'll mention the precedence. Daily Deviation, positive critiques. I didn't even scroll to the views, comments, or favorites, all of which I'm sure have been given in plentiful quantity. It's a quality poem, there's no question. Into it:
The idea to pay homage to predecessors is longstanding. Writers often have someone else in the medium they look up to, Hunter S. Thompson was well known for thinking, "What would Horatio Alger do?" I'm sure anyone who loves to write themselves will find a way to relate to his piece, with the path identified as safely paved by respectable Gentlemen. It's easier to traverse the unknown with this knowledge. Relativity is a very important part of writing, and is done masterfully with his piece. Readers should feel like they are being spoken for, as houfh the words are being stolen from thei own mouths and reorganized into beauty at the hands of the poet. This is dine with this piece. The pace is excellent and maintained throughout each individual homage, making each of the chosen adventures with these literary giants relative through the poet. Other clever skills are easily displayed, earning the DD; alliteration, internal rhyme. The piece humbly oozes with skill. Worth every moment taken to read.